In act1 scene5 of Romeo and Juliet it is love at first sight as Romeo and Juliet meet, whilst tybalt wishes to start a fight but capulet restrains him. Juliet questions her nurse about the unknown young man and Romeo questions the nurse who Juliet’s mum is. Quote of Juliet “go ask his name if he be married, my gravies like to be my wedding bed”
December 12, 2014 at 3:55 pm
Albion, this is a lovely start. I particularly like the begging motif at the start and end of the first and last stanzas.
Some things to consider:
1) Re-read the poem to correct any grammatical errors, including repeated words.
2) I like the capitalisation of ‘forever’ at the end of the poem. However, I would reconsider the exclamation marks.
3) Could you develop the depth of your nautical imagery? You have included a fair few references, but I think you need to develop their detail a little to increase the sophistication of the poem.
Very nice work.